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SPN: Baby brother Sam (from Hell House)
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SPN fic: An Unfortunate Sighting (see warnings)

Title: An Unfortunate Sighting
Summary: December 1996. The Winchesters make home in Boulder, Colorado where Sam sees something his family cannot. Gen Teen!chesters story.
Warnings: Non-explicit domestic discipline (spanking)
Rating: PG
Author Notes: Secret Santa gift for nocturnal08. Prompt: jackalope. Written in omnipresent 3rd person POV. You can read more about jackalopes here. Don’t ask me why I wrote haikus for this, *headdesk* I just can’t explain it :) Maybe I was inspired by the website I just linked to. The last haiku is not mine.
Word Count: 3135

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LOL! I loved the story. Nasty jackalope, getting poor Sammy in trouble like that. :) I loved the way John patiently listened to what both boys had to say about the incident. And I can see Dean being panicked and pissed after three hours of Sam being gone. Loved this bit from Dean:
“I know you invented that dumb excuse just to get out of your chores, Sammy. I ask you to go wash the car and what do you do? After huffing and puffing about it for forty minutes you finally decide it’s Wabbit season!?! How stupid do you think I am?”

That had me laughing. I liked the way John 'punished' Dean by making him wash the car, and that he almost wished Dean would protest, but knew he wouldn't. That's perfectly Dean. I loved that John carried Sam up to his room after the spanking.

I thought it was very true to character that Sam's reaction to Dean being angry was much more panicked then his reaction to John being angry at him, partially becuase Dean isn't usually angry at him. I liked that John let Dean do the spanking the second time since Dean was clearly the insulted party - who would take the wheel of his 'baby' and not expect some retaliation? I felt kind of bad for Sam when Dean didn't hug him after spanking him (mostly because Sam really seemed to want it), but I find it believable.

It worked really well in the story to not realize it was Christmas until close to the end of the story. Not only a surprise to Sammy, but also to the readers. :) I liked that Dean thought Sam was making it all up just so they could do a 'real' Christmas again. It made me sad that they hadn't done any kind of Christmas for so long, and the pain in John's voice was especially sad. But it's awesome that the three of them get to do Christmas together this year. :)

The ending had me laughing again - who knew jackalopes drank whiskey? Not me. I'll have to keep it under lock and key from now on. ;) Thanks very much for the story, it was lovely.

Thank you so so much for reading and reviewing Jen! I am happy that you enjoyed reading this and it made you laugh :)

I thought it was very true to character that Sam's reaction to Dean being angry was much more panicked then his reaction to John being angry at him, partially becuase Dean isn't usually angry at him

That is true! And also partially because Sam is closer to Dean than to his Dad, and looks up to Dean for approval more than he does from his Dad. Yeah, the poor kid does wish for more displays of affection from Dean, which have probably dwindled over the past few years as Dean got older. So I felt for the boy too while writing it heh.

And thank you! I'm so glad the Christmas reveal worked! :) I wanted it to end well and happy (and dare I say funny) so the jackalope's stealing whiskey legend fit right in with it hehe :D

Thanks once again sweetheart. You've made my day!! :)

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